First, I really liked the opening. Ashleigh (as a name) threw me off for a moment, but beyond that I was impressed how you established strangeness and a unique setting while still retaining familiarity. I especially liked how you made me relate to and feel connected to Ashleigh before establishing that she was bionic. It made me see her as a person first, which was good because the story hinges a little on relating to her loneliness.
I followed well (Although I have a good understanding of astronomy), and I was certainly intrigued. Would I pick it up at a book store? Depends on my mood. Normally I would not, mainly because it strikes me more as a romance, which is not a preferred genre.
Thanks so much for the useful feedback! Yeah, I think it's that mixture of the strange and the familiar that makes for great science fiction and fantasy. That's something that's uppermost on my mind; it becomes super important that the more fantastical or unrelatable the setting, the more relatable the character needs to be.
First, I really liked the opening. Ashleigh (as a name) threw me off for a moment, but beyond that I was impressed how you established strangeness and a unique setting while still retaining familiarity. I especially liked how you made me relate to and feel connected to Ashleigh before establishing that she was bionic. It made me see her as a person first, which was good because the story hinges a little on relating to her loneliness.
I followed well (Although I have a good understanding of astronomy), and I was certainly intrigued. Would I pick it up at a book store? Depends on my mood. Normally I would not, mainly because it strikes me more as a romance, which is not a preferred genre.
Thanks so much for the useful feedback! Yeah, I think it's that mixture of the strange and the familiar that makes for great science fiction and fantasy. That's something that's uppermost on my mind; it becomes super important that the more fantastical or unrelatable the setting, the more relatable the character needs to be.